The web site looks great. The copy (word ad) should be more concise. Leave out the part about other facepainters not being good. The fact that "they may use acrylic paints which can be uncomfortable and cause allergic reaction" is good enough. Giving your opion on whether they are good or not sounds unprofessional. The line "I'm pretty good" is weak and not nessecary, I can see by the photos the quality of your work. If you want to say something funny and more positive say, "I'm the best face painter in the country, of course all the really good facepainters live in the city."
This line is not clear and it doesn't have an ending parenthesis, "(call and I think you'll be surprised just how much so for what you get! Both most likely are typos. The pics are good I like the way they float up with the balloons. I love the butterfly face.
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