Will, this is a great start for a clown skit. There are a couple of points that Karen Bell and other Ringling clowns emphasize when teaching about skit writing. One of them is that a skit needs a beginning a middle and an end. Your skit has that; a) the clown enters the barbershop, b) the haircut takes place, and c) "the blowoff" where the bad hairsut is revealed and the barber is chased off the stage. Another point is "the rule of three" and that means that there should be three sections to the middle of the skit. You might want to add just a little bit to the skit. Here is an idea to show you what I am talking about.
When the clown sits down the barber cuts a little bit and then stops and holds up a mirror but nobody sees a difference. "I said do your worst." So the barber cuts some more and this time some tufts of hair are tossed away. The barber steps back and holds up the mirror again but people still see no difference. Now the victim says "I SAID DO YOUR WORST!" Okay, the barber starts to cut again and this time great gobs of hair start flying and the skit finishes just as you wrote it.
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